Anita is a beautiful girl. You have focused well on her eyes. She has very good eye contact with the camera (viewer) and a pretty smile. Her make-up is well applied. The lighting is good, but I would like to see the main light a little higher so that the shadow from her nose is at a diagonal down her face rather than off to the side. The kicker on her left is very well done (not overly bright -- good job). The background is nicely neutral and the burning of the edges is well done.
I'm not sure why you chose to use a horizontal format with a vertical subject. It would make more sense to use a vertical format. There is nothing in the background to warrant a horizontal shot.
You want to compositionally balance the left and right sides of the photograph. The compositional "rule" for this suggests that you position the tip of the subject's nose in the vertical center of the photograph.
I would like to see a little more light in her eyes. The whites of her eyes could be a little whiter. There is an extra refection on the left side of her left eye. Your kicker should have been positioned a little farther behind her. That reflection should be removed.
She not exactly posed straight on to the camera, but very close.This is not a very feminine pose -- it is a masculine pose. Showing your subject’s widest areas (shoulder to shoulder or hip to hip) makes those areas appear wide. Your subject will appear thinner, more feminine and more graceful if turned at an angle to the camera. The lines you see from an angle have more apparent motion, interest and grace.
Your advertising -- Ashraf Khunduqji Photography -- is not part of the photograph. Your name could be placed on the mat. Advertising would be better placed on back of the photograph.
Mark, you seem to want to change every little nit-picking thing about this wonderful portrait image. I personally think it's such a wonderful and pleasing-to-the-eye piece of photographical bliss! Anita's body-angle to the camera is very flattering for her. If you've done any professional portrait work, then I suggest you submit them. OK? Let's see them!
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